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Tuesday, June 9, 2015

Five Ways of looking at a banana

In Room three we have been looking at figurative and poetic language. Below is an extract from Nathaniel. We'd love your comments and feedback.

As yellow as a sun the banana rest on the fruit like a yellow hearted long stick.

The banana is happy because of the smile on his face.

Think of the yellow skin as a shield in disguise  protecting the food from the flies.

The rancid banana brought bats back behind Batman's babies so the babies brought the rancid banana as Batman's baton.

Ok it smiled at me.    

By Nathaniel

24 comments:

  1. WOW that poem is cool and funny. what a good vocabulary.

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    1. Thanks Ronald any feed back

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    2. I like your banana poem because i like bananas

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  2. I love it because it is really funny.
    Thank you Nathaniel

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  3. Great alliteration but I think you need some rhyming words so it would be more fascinating for people to read your poem.
    Thanks Nathaniel.

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  4. I really loved the poem,it reminds me of monkeys that eat banana's.Does this poem refer to any other poems?Thanks from Caroline

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  5. I really liked the ending of the poem and it reminds me of monkeys!!! Are you going to make a poem about something else?????

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  6. I like your banana story because i like bananas i like your elegant words and something funny it reminds me about a monkey those a banana smile but nice work

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  7. I like your banana story because i like bananas i like your elegant words and something funny it reminds me about a monkey those a banana smile but nice work

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  8. i like how u used good vocab.good bananas . could u make it smaller

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  9. I like the end of the poem it remind's me when i was little are you going to see one again.

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  11. I like how U use simile in the poem and it reminds me that when I went and stared at a banana.

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  12. good work kids keep it up by Tamata'Ane

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  13. good work kids keep it up by Tamata'Ane

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  14. Your poem made me smile too! Good use of language - the verse with words starting with 'b' reminded me of tongue twisters! Have you written about any other fruits?
    from Barbara

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  15. Your poem is really interesting.It makes me think of monkeys and banana's joined together and it would make a monana.Do you like banana's?
    Thanks Caroline

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  17. Hey awesome work Nathaniel!! I loved your similes they were great.Maybe next time check if your poem makes sense.

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