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Tuesday, June 9, 2015

Five Ways of looking at a banana

In Room three we have been looking at figurative and poetic language. Below is an extract from Nathaniel. We'd love your comments and feedback.

As yellow as a sun the banana rest on the fruit like a yellow hearted long stick.
The banana is happy because of the smile on his face.
Think of the yellow skin as a shield in disguise  protecting the food from the flies.

The rancid banana brought bats back behind Batman's babies so the babies brought the rancid banana as Batman's baton.
Ok it smiled at me.    

By Nathaniel
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24 comments:

  1. AnonymousJune 9, 2015 at 2:24 PM

    WOW that poem is cool and funny. what a good vocabulary.

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    1. AnonymousJune 9, 2015 at 2:30 PM

      Thanks Ronald any feed back

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    2. AnonymousJune 9, 2015 at 2:36 PM

      Thanks Ronald any feed back

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    3. AnonymousJune 9, 2015 at 2:38 PM

      I like your banana poem because i like bananas

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  2. AnonymousJune 9, 2015 at 2:31 PM

    I love it because it is really funny.
    Thank you Nathaniel

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  3. AnonymousJune 9, 2015 at 2:35 PM

    Great alliteration but I think you need some rhyming words so it would be more fascinating for people to read your poem.
    Thanks Nathaniel.

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    1. AnonymousJune 9, 2015 at 2:38 PM

      Thanks for the feed back

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    2. AnonymousJune 9, 2015 at 2:44 PM

      Thanks for the feed back

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  4. AnonymousJune 9, 2015 at 4:32 PM

    I really loved the poem,it reminds me of monkeys that eat banana's.Does this poem refer to any other poems?Thanks from Caroline

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  5. AnonymousJune 12, 2015 at 10:42 AM

    I really liked the ending of the poem and it reminds me of monkeys!!! Are you going to make a poem about something else?????

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  6. AnonymousJune 12, 2015 at 10:57 AM

    I like your banana story because i like bananas i like your elegant words and something funny it reminds me about a monkey those a banana smile but nice work

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  7. AnonymousJune 12, 2015 at 10:57 AM

    I like your banana story because i like bananas i like your elegant words and something funny it reminds me about a monkey those a banana smile but nice work

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  8. AnonymousJune 15, 2015 at 10:25 AM

    i like how u used good vocab.good bananas . could u make it smaller

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  9. Nathaniel.AJune 15, 2015 at 10:36 AM

    I like the end of the poem it remind's me when i was little are you going to see one again.

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  10. AnonymousJune 17, 2015 at 2:17 PM

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  11. AnonymousJune 17, 2015 at 2:17 PM

    I like how U use simile in the poem and it reminds me that when I went and stared at a banana.

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  12. AnonymousJune 24, 2015 at 11:33 AM

    good work kids keep it up by Tamata'Ane

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  13. AnonymousJune 24, 2015 at 11:33 AM

    good work kids keep it up by Tamata'Ane

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  14. AnonymousJune 30, 2015 at 7:24 PM

    Your poem made me smile too! Good use of language - the verse with words starting with 'b' reminded me of tongue twisters! Have you written about any other fruits?
    from Barbara

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  15. AnonymousJuly 2, 2015 at 10:31 AM

    Your poem is really interesting.It makes me think of monkeys and banana's joined together and it would make a monana.Do you like banana's?
    Thanks Caroline

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  17. AnonymousAugust 11, 2015 at 10:57 AM

    Hey awesome work Nathaniel!! I loved your similes they were great.Maybe next time check if your poem makes sense.

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